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Post by winddance on Jul 20, 2021 18:27:08 GMT -5
dear, find me
smitten
(always loved that word)
tingle nose to
toes
eyes, a portal
gleaming
one glance is
all
heart beats
one
twothree
could listen again and again
the rythym
again
(far off)
you
now a
resounding
echo
candles burnt
into wax silhouettes
of my dreams
in
cardboard boxes that carry
my history
dusty valentines
(from somebody)
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Post by Bromanoph on Jul 22, 2021 12:55:02 GMT -5
I love this, the style and the reference... cummings is by far my favourite poet. Well played.
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Post by piph on Jul 28, 2021 15:52:49 GMT -5
seems very present .. very now, but then takes us into a more sober past... of things in a box
love it!
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Post by acutesteelepyro on Aug 6, 2021 13:01:28 GMT -5
I love your leading structure, The count pace even seemed accelerated
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Post by petra6 on Dec 9, 2021 18:33:03 GMT -5
nice allusions winddance.
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Post by sillylillylightbulb on Jan 25, 2023 20:08:55 GMT -5
I love your structure and the flow, it comes through when spoken.
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